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Thursday, 22 March 2018

The death of the flower

The death of the flower

Floating away the frosty furry flower falling from the night sky.
Fascinating to see that flower is falling out of life.
Freezing petals getting more frozen by the minute.
Fading away the flower  faints in despair.
The fearless flower fought well.
In the frozen where the flower should not have been.
Freezing cold making the petals on the flower fall.
Pretty funny thinking of frozen frosty flower freezing to death.
Furry flower petal frosting up with ice.
Fuzzy feeling against my face woke me up with a freezing scare.

Hopefully no other flowers freeze there.

6 comments:

  1. Hi there Lauren,
    WOW! I absolutely love this poem. You have used so much descriptive language. I can really tell the message you were getting across about the flower being out in the cold and slowly fading away and how it was fighting to stay alive. What is your favourite type of flower? mine is the chinese rainbow rose. Maybe next time you tell us why you had to make this poem?

    Yours Sincerely Grace
    Yaldhurst Model School

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  2. Hi Lauren, My name is Mia from Yaldhurst Model School. This poem is so graceful and slow, it really paints a picture in your head.

    I really like the alliteration you have used in this poem, my favorite sentence was, Fading away the flower faints in despair. Did you have to think hard to find the right words for it?

    What a great Poem!
    Mia

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  3. I did have to think for it. thank you for the comment.

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  4. Hi Lauren I am Hayley from Wigram primary school
    I really like your poem. You must have thought really hard about you poem. Did you think about adding in a picture. How come you had to write a poem about a death of a flower?
    Great poem!
    Hayley

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  5. Hi hayley,
    I did not have to do that theme I wanted to to. we got to choose.
    Thanks for the comment!

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  6. Hey Lauren Im from yaldhurst model school.
    I like you story very interesting and you have some ISPACE whats really good.
    did you like making this ?

    Kind regards Chloe.

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